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Anyone can write in verse. It is new and fascinating but remember people will automatically be prepared to compare you with Ellen Hopkins whose 'verse' series for young adults is amazing, hard-hitting, gritty, and critically acclaimed. It was one of the most recent (and successful) of its kind in many years. I think Jabberwocky is probably the only other novel I can think of done that way and that is a book of verse. Ellen Hopkins entire series is verse.